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Post by dickens on Jan 24, 2008 18:05:57 GMT -5
rootpaw gazed out over the beach. this was his favorite spot in the world. WHY? he asked starclan WHY HAVE YOU BROUGHT THESE NEW COMERS HERE? he spoke of the mysterious couple, Snowpaw and Nightpaw, and their kits, Ivykit and Mistkit. He was mysteriuosly in love with Mistkit. her greypelt glazed everywhere she went. STARCLAN GUIDE ME, SHOW MY CLAN TO TRUST THEM, LET THEM FREE!
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Post by dickens on Jan 24, 2008 18:14:02 GMT -5
He leaped to his paws as he heard a squek. WHO'S THERE? he asked, full of embarssment. *it's me... Mistkit*
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Post by dickens on Jan 24, 2008 18:18:05 GMT -5
OH NO he thought. YOU SHOULDN'T BE OUT HERE! *you shouldn't either!* she defended herself. ACTUALLY, I CAN. I;M AN APPRENTICE.. YOUR A KIT *i know, but I thought you could teach me something* Rootpaw's heart flopped and his eyes shined. IT WOULD BE MY HONOR. he answered. and they walked to the waterside, the moon just peeking out from behing the mountains.
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Post by dickens on Jan 25, 2008 6:47:45 GMT -5
OK... LET'S START... IF SOMEONE ATTACKS YOU WHAT DO YOU DO? *bite their neck, and flip them...* NOT NECCESARLY... WELL LET ME SEE YOU DO IT Rootpaw ran at the kit, Mistkit poised herself and when he came near... she bit his scruff and flipped him
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Post by dickens on Jan 25, 2008 14:50:38 GMT -5
NICE, BUT I'VE GOT A NEW WAY. she looked at him strange. WHAT? *what other way?* IF I RUN AT YOU KICK YOUR FEET OUT LIKE A SHEEP. IT WILL KNOCK ME UNCONCIOUS FOR A SECOND. SO YOU HAVE A CHANCE TO PUMBLE ME.. BUT DONT REALLY. Again he ran at her, she stood on her front paws and kicked out her feet. Rootpaw went flying. *Like tht?* YES JUST LIKE THAT
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Post by dickens on Jan 25, 2008 15:40:22 GMT -5
IT'S GETTING LATE.. LETS GO BACK *but I need you to teach me EVERYTHING!!!!* dON'T FRET. WHY DO YOU NEED TO KNOW IT TODAY.. I'LL TEACH YOU TOMORROW. *before.. sun high?* WHY YOU GOT A DATE? he asked with a fluttery feeling in his stomach. *ya, actually. My sister challenged me to match* THAT'S AGAINST THE CODE!!!!!!!! * I know... but she won't back down.* THEN YOU BACK DOWN
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Post by guesswhoicepaw1 on Jan 25, 2008 17:34:39 GMT -5
ooc: Uhh... why aren't there quotation mark thingies? ( " --" ) And why does it seem like more than half of this is speech? Just wondering...
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Post by dickens on Jan 26, 2008 15:58:23 GMT -5
shut it!!!!! this is my page,only people who i allow can talk here. And there are quotations!!! when Rootpaw talks its in CAPS when Mistkit talks its in *______*
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Post by dickens on Feb 12, 2008 17:52:40 GMT -5
when Mistkit gave him a look of puzzlement he said LET'S GO he licked her sweat covered face. he felt happy to be here with her.
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Post by dickens on Feb 12, 2008 18:00:49 GMT -5
The next morning the mist in the air made the beach look like a barren landscape, so barren that you could almost see starclan itself on the water. Mistkit rose from her soft bed, and walked outside the den. her sister was redy to fight. *Oh, no.* where was Rootpaw? her sister glared at her. (ready... fox dung?) Before she knew it mistkit was on the beach staring at her sister. Ivykit sprang at her. Out of nowhere a flash of brown escaped from the bushes. Ivykit was toppled over in midair. THAT'S ENOUGH Rootpaw said with a trembling voice. Mistkit rushed over and rubbed herself against Rootpaw.
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Post by dickens on Feb 12, 2008 18:10:42 GMT -5
After that... the wind pushed the fog and snow from the mountains blowing it over the beach. the air became cold and the cats scattered for their dens. The next morning there was a thick layer of white apple bloosoms only they were cold, and watery.
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 7:55:49 GMT -5
Mistkit's eyes widened. she cuddled closer to her motherSnowstorm. "it's fine dear, it's snow, from starclan. it comes every leafbare." she nodded.
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 8:07:56 GMT -5
Rootpaw trudged through the snow. he had never seen it but he had heard tales of it. he was on prey patrol. he smelt the air, sparrow, mouse, and a strange smell. He sniffed again. "what is it Rootpaw?" asked one of his companions. I DON'T KNOW. he followed the scent, the patrol followed him. he decided to wait because a mouse sped in front of him. He pounced and with one swipe of his massive paw, knocked the rodent to it's death. He burried it, then followed the smell.
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 8:14:37 GMT -5
he followed it for a while, then smelt something else. fox. he hissed. then someone yelled "LOOK!" Rootpaw looked down, blood. he sniffed that, too. FOX he announced. the blood was stained in a trail on the snow. what would be bigger than a fox? A badger... no. bigger.
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 8:27:32 GMT -5
the trail went on, until it came to a huge cave. almost as big as shadow's. it was silent for a moment no one dared go in. then came a low growl.. Rootpaw felt his throat tighten. eyes appeared through the darkness. RUN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 9:47:27 GMT -5
Mistkit paced back and forth. where was he? finally rootpaw emerged into the camp, breathless. *you look like you've been chased down by a pack of tigers.* I NEED TO TALK TO TALK TO SHINGSTAR. *what's the rush?* I SAW... I'LL TELL YOU LATER he rushed into the undergrowth to Shingstar's den. What was wrong with him?
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 10:03:50 GMT -5
Rootpaw slipped into Shingstar's den. "Yes, Rootpaw?" Shiningstar said without turning. HOW DID YOU KNOW IT WAS ME? "your fear scent. what do you want? what have you found." A STRANGE SCENT LINGERED IN THE WOODS, WE FOLLOWED IT. AND... FOUND A SPLATTER OF BLOOD, FOX BLOOD. now shiningstar was interested. "what? go on" THERE WAS A TRAIL OF BLOOD. WE FOLLOWED IT AND FOUND.. A CAVE. "what was in it?" EYES. BIG EYES. GLARING AT US
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 10:12:27 GMT -5
"THEN IT'S TRUE." Shiningstar said in a horse voice.WHAT IS? "a prochecy I was told. A beast will rip up the roots of the forest and shake the life from it like dirt.
Mistkit gasped. she had her ear to the opening of the den.
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Post by dickens on Feb 13, 2008 12:51:02 GMT -5
Rootpaw walked out of the den to see Mistkit glaring at him. DID YOU HEAR ALL OF THAT *yes I did.* she said tapping her foot. *why wouldn’t you tell me?* I NEEDED TO TELL SHININGSTAR FIRST
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Post by Wolf Tears on Feb 14, 2008 16:59:44 GMT -5
Whoa, whoa, whoa.
1.) What's with the all-caps? They're obnoxious and distracting. All speech should be in quotations, no matter who's talking, and each new speaker should start a new paragraph.
2.) Shiningstar is Silverflash's character. Not yours. You cannot use her, especially considering she's a Clan leader.
3.) Only Silverflash and Picabo can start up site plots are release prophecies.
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Post by dickens on Feb 18, 2008 15:46:39 GMT -5
shiningstar is the leader of the clan.. I had to use him! OH and your distracting! not my writing. didn't you see what I told someone else? stop writing in this space! sorry sivlerflash didn't mean to steal you're charecter. but I had to use the leader of Oc.eanclan
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Post by dickens on Feb 18, 2008 15:50:22 GMT -5
*so he's more important?* YES Rootpaw shuddered. I HAD TO TELL HIM. HE HAS TO GET SOME WARRIORS TO HELP ME DEFEAT THE... BEAST. *do you know what it is?* Rootpaw shook his head, his sleek fur stood on end, BUT WHAT EVER IT IS, IT WON'T BE THERE FOR LONG
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Post by dickens on Feb 18, 2008 15:52:37 GMT -5
The next morning Mistkit awoke and tip-toed to the apprentice den to see if rootpaw would except her apology. she had been pretty hard, afterall he was to save the clan. But when she pushed into the den, all the bodies that usually lay there were gone.
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Post by dickens on Feb 18, 2008 15:57:27 GMT -5
she ran to the warriors den. nothing. she gave a soft squek. then ran to Shiningstar's den. *there gone!* she wailed as she flung herself through the opening of his den. (Who is gone MIstkit?) asked a thundering voice. a big hairy beast turned to face her. It's eyes glowing. (Oh your friends? I ate them, now I shall eat you!) he stalked forward, slowly. Mistkit let out a long wail.
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Post by dickens on Feb 18, 2008 16:01:36 GMT -5
"stop fidgeting! I sware if you slept next to starclan they'd push you off the cloud." *what?* Mistkit rubbed her eyes with her paw. "you're a worm that's what! you never stop dreaming, what were you doing, being chased by badgers?" *oh Ivykit! I had a horrible dream! I have to tell Rootpaw something.* Mistkit leaped to her feet and ran to the apprentice den. she smiled all the way there, until she ran in.
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Post by dickens on Feb 18, 2008 16:06:37 GMT -5
nothing, nope nobody. *it's true* she whispered *they're gone!* she ran straight for Shiningstar's den. but when she got there she slowed and stuck her head in to see if the cost was clear. Just Shiningstar. *good.* she whispered. "yes Mistkit?" he asked. she ignored that he knew it was her. *where is everybody?* "In here of course." he patted his belly with his tail. *you ate them? * "No! In my den. I just ate a plump vole so I'm patting my stomach. "
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Post by Wolf Tears on Feb 18, 2008 16:45:56 GMT -5
If someone has a valid point to make, there’s nothing stopping them posting. And both Icepaw and I had something to say.
Shiningstar… is… a girl. O.o
And again with the plot thing, and this is definitely a plot.
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Post by dickens on Feb 29, 2008 12:47:42 GMT -5
please stop writing here! I :'(I'm trying to copy this onto a disk but I can't If you guys keep writing. If I make somewhere for you guys to post comments about my story can you stop writing here? OK that's what I'll do. I'll make another "Rootpaw's Bravery postings" page
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Post by dickens on Feb 29, 2008 12:54:32 GMT -5
"we're having a meeting about... well I'll be honest. about how we're going to rid this... beast from our turf." Everybody nodded, fear scent lurked the air. they're eyes were clouded with doom. *I had a strange dream. that..*
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Post by dickens on Feb 29, 2008 14:06:20 GMT -5
she told them the hole story, top to bottom. they were stunned. "is that a sign?" some asked. "we've been thinking that we could lure the beast here, then all attack." *but if it get's away it will know where are clan lives.* "it won't escape," Shiningstar insured himself more than Mistkit
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